The intro is all day, then the first scene is night. I think a few night shots in the intro would be a better set up. I like the shadow shot of them dropping hands – this is effective. I really think the direction for your main character could be stronger. It’s not clear what he’s going through when he leaves her for the bathroom. Overall, I have to say it’s not as strong as it could be in terms of story depth, and empathy for the character. It’s a story that is something we all experience, yet I watch it and don’t ache for this guy, or learn something about myself, and I wish I did.
The intro is all day, then the first scene is night. I think a few night shots in the intro would be a better set up. I like the shadow shot of them dropping hands – this is effective. I really think the direction for your main character could be stronger. It’s not clear what he’s going through when he leaves her for the bathroom. Overall, I have to say it’s not as strong as it could be in terms of story depth, and empathy for the character. It’s a story that is something we all experience, yet I watch it and don’t ache for this guy, or learn something about myself, and I wish I did.
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